ML093630131
| ML093630131 | |
| Person / Time | |
|---|---|
| Site: | Indian Point  |
| Issue date: | 03/05/1971 |
| From: | Hanauer S US Atomic Energy Commission (AEC) |
| To: | Anthony Giambusso US Atomic Energy Commission (AEC) |
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-7 March 5, 1971 Note to A. Giambusso INDIAN POINT REPORT I have concentrated my attention but not satisfactory.
upon Volume I,.which I find improved There is a great difference between "there is no evidence to substanti ate" and "the available evidence shows the contrary.", but you have used the two expressions interchangeably.
The Summary must be lovingly and carefully gone over till each of these conclusion phrases means what you really mean, They all could use going over, but Items 3 (limited data indicate that chemical discharges have not caused
,4 (very wishy-washy), and 5 (Data show have not damaged...
)are in especial need.
Page D(2)-3, para. 5.
Page D(3)-2, para.3.
Page D(3)-3, para. 5.
Page D(3)-4, para. 6.
Page D(4)-2,.paras.. 4
- 8.
Page D(4)-5, line 5.
We now know that kills occur in the absence of heated water.
Punch line excessively feeble. Note much better conclusion i~n para. 4.
First sentence -
any reason to doubt? Whole paragraph in doubt -
"insuffici*ent confirmatory information to preclude "---what kind of reasoning?
Not bad by itself, but does not follow preceding paragraphs.
Need to be completely rewritten. Detailed discus sion of calculation and assumptions have no place here' Besides, you cast doubt on the assumptions and statements. The result is reader chaos.
The final conclusion (last of para. 8) is sapped of its punch.
"Populations" very bad -
means _people to average reader.
How about all the measurements of radioactivity in fish, plants, etc. -
they seem to be ignored OFFICE N --------------
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